Constructive Promo Criticism

Ok, so I decided to make this thread so people can link their promos and the other members rate em from 1-10, and/or tell them what the issues there are with the promos. Thought it would be a nice way for people to know what's not good about their RPs and how to improve them, that is if they care which they should, if they don't that's their problem. Let's start this (If someone even cares).

I love this idea. I'll start.

https://owen.forumotion.net/t598-christian-speaks-on-alberto-del-rio

Err.. Why not, I guess ill join in.

https://owen.forumotion.net/t603-the-best-in-the-world#1547

xcorehxcx: 7.5/10. The formatting is nice, the grammar is nice and you seem to really get into the Christian character, the racist jokes were fun but that was pretty much all you did when talking about Del Rio. You're good and you can be great but I'd recomend to focus on more stuff rather than just talking about one subject.

Jizzus::8/10. Just like xcore, you seem to really get into your character and that's something good. For a return promo, it was pretty damn good, it seems that you're bringing the kayfabe breaking CM Punk from July 2011 and while that may sound nice, basing your character in a kayfabe breaking one is not a really good idea because after two or three promos they will just get old. Besides that I enjoyed the promo, keep up the good work.